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Friday, 17 May 2019

Captured.

It all started with a lovely morning.  The birds were singing and the bells were ringing.  
But the bells were not happy bells of joy, they were bells of destruction.
Two men scrambled into Patricia's cabin and captured her and her baby boy billy.
It was a quick fight and kidnap for Patricia.  But not for the town.  
The towns fight lasted for hours on end.  But Patricia was already in a canoe.


25 miles out in the Indian ocean.  Suddenly water started gushing into the canoe.
 Within seconds the canoe had sank. And Patricia was left floating in the water all tied up
looking at her baby.  She breaks her arms free.  But her legs are not yet.  She clutches onto
Billy and lifts him onto a piece of boat floating on the top of the water.  She lifts herself onto
the boat piece and feeds her newborn one more time. When she gets back into the water,
the wood piece comes more back up to the surface of the water.

The two are left waiting in the ocean.  Drifting away in the current.  
With no one but themselves.  Hoping for help.




Word count: 189

6 comments:

  1. you followed your plan really good i liked patrica and it was a good story over all. there were a couple of parts i didn't get but that might've just been me miss reading it.

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    1. THANKS NICKYYYYY

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    2. that's okkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkk

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    3. I liked reading your story. It made me happy when the mood changed from happy to sad.

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    4. thank you ;)

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  2. Whoa that was an intense piece of writing, you really drew me in, and even though it was sad I kept wanting to read it. I hope they were saved. Awesome work Buddy xx

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